I thought what you wrote here was very good! I like the way you used the 3rd person perspective to really help this visually come to life. There are some ways you might want to improve on making the reader really feel apart of the terror that needs to grip them in scenes like this one, but over all this piece is really great! Another thing I love about this is the wording. I felt that I was really was in an older time with the use of the words like lantern and cobblestone and just the way you set up some up the sentences are amazing! I hope you keep writing because this is something that shows you have what it takes to be a great writer.